Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. do you agree or disagree?
The 20th and 21st centuries are characterized by all the momentous changes which have been made in humans' lives. Perhaps the most significant milestone of these two centuries is the expansion of computer games that have penetrated every single facet of children's lives. Stemming from this fact, a relevant question that is a moot point is whether children should be banned from playing computer games because it is a waste of time. Due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general argument on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that in spite of having fun when playing computers games, they have deleterious effects on our lives especially for children and juveniles. The following paragraphs will aptly substantiate my personal stance.
To commence with, children are pillars of every given society that play a pivotal role in future of countries. Indeed, parents should raise awareness and bend over backward to nurture their children as greatly as possible. Generally phrased, one of the heavy burdens on the shoulder of parents is raising children who are well adjusted to the society. Not only should they inform children what is proper and what is improper but also should encourage them to do outdoor activities like soccer, volleyball and so forth, not just play a computer game. As a tangible example, spending a great time on playing games will create some health problems for children. In fact, radiation emitted by the screen will have the negative impact on children's eyesight or some children get used to the sedentary lifestyle. To elucidate more on this issue, children should avoid anything that prevents them from leading a healthy life and not until parents encourage their children to do other activities can their children make a progress.
Another reason that should not go unnoticed is that if children are encouraged to spend their time on outdoor activities, a great opportunity will be provided for them to make a new friendship and socialize with other children. To put it in another word, a plethora of children are shy and introverted so, hardly ever can they make a relationship if they stay at home and play computers games. Going into the depth, there are vast majorities of children who are like to do some exciting activities like swimming, some sports activities and so on, in such cases, children will provide an opportunity not only to enhance their social skills but also increase their self-confidence and self-esteem. However, there are different computer games as educational packages that are useful and effective for children and not only can children play them in their leisure time but also can have fun without any immoral problem. As far as if am concerned, these games could patronize children to grow up maturely without an inferiority complex.
In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, in fact, in spite of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2428.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06889352818 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7301174761 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519832985386 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.7435005016 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.789473684 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84210526316 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349320271186 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108233278147 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902972246691 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191933071875 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114570226472 0.0645574589148 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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