In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
Nowadays, the unforgiving economic pressure has led most of the people, being adults or juveniles, to work either voluntarily or obligatorily to afford living expenses, and student teenagers are no exception. Moreover, there has been a hot controversy among practitioners of the Child Labor Community, whether student teenagers’ working is appropriate or may have an adverse effect on their future. While many people believe that students’ part-time job can have a detrimental impact on them, I firmly believe that teenagers’ job while being a student is beneficiary due to the following reasons.
A Persian dignitary whose name eludes me at the moment once said: “the money one earns with labor and hardship is more appreciated than easy money.” Likewise, many ordinary people and even some psychologists believe in teenagers working while studying because not only will they understand and appreciate the value of money, but also they will spend the money they earn wisely. Furthermore, being a student and working at the same time can bring students a sense of independence, which shed light on their future performance. Psychologically speaking, the teenage period is the most critical time of one’s life, and this is the time that every teenager may experience a sense of proudness. In such circumstances, they cannot accept pocket money from their parents since they consider themselves old enough to be able to take on the responsibility of working themselves. Hence, a part-time job will fulfill their wants and desires besides a sense of being.
There is a false premise that the early working of teenagers will adversely shape their behavior and their relationship. However, this stance is no longer hold because studies have revealed that being among people and working during teenage time have a positive and significant effect on teenagers’ communication relationships. There will be a spike in the number of people they know- colleagues, employers, customers- who have different attitudes and beliefs, which requires the teenager to learn how to adapt to various situations. In this vein, the teenager not only will experience the reality of life but also will be ready to get along and accept multiple people with different characteristics.
To sum up, while there are arguments to be made for both sides of the issue, it is clear that there are many more significant advantages of allowing teenage students to do the job. From the reasons mentioned above, it is evident that teenagers should be allowed to do the job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to live'.
Suggestion: to live
...r voluntarily or obligatorily to afford living expenses, and student teenagers are no ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, so, while, even so, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23716381418 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96051978529 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540342298289 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.8803343828 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2142857143 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211095051329 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822082219494 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045338935256 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145689859173 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029158194593 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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