Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

As the smart phone is one of the most common in used technolopgy, Which getting more valuable with time. Personally, though, I believe that providing the child with a smart phone is very important. I feel this way for the following reasons that I will show.

To begin with, knowing the place of the child is very comfortable for each parents which is easy to get by calling them any time. It will help them to be more connecting with others in schools. For example, If they have missed a class and despair to know what they missed. They could contact to a friend by phone easily.

First of all, the smart phone means an easier access to interent which is a big world by itself. Internet could help the child to know more informations about any subject they don't know. If there is a course in the school and the child didn't understand it from the teacher. The child could looking for it on the internet. Futhermore, a general information about health or any topic they fell passionated could be known through the internet.

Secondly, they can use the smart phone to practice games. One of the important games for a child is chess. Chess is so helpful for a child to learn planning and strategies. Soduko is very helpful to learn them probabilities. Puzzeles is so good for completeing a picture and focusing.

Furtehmore, They can have fun by memorizing any funny moments in their lifes which might help them to dicover their passion about taking pictures. Another hoppies could be learned therough using the phone apps. One of them coukd learning music such as guitar by using coachy guitar apps. Learlning drawing or photoshopes.

In conclusion, Smart phones is very good tro be used by achild, sence it will help them to discover their entire world by learning a plenty of skills. Which might be the begining of their passion in the life

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69018404908 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48312646601 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509202453988 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7749648811 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.4782608696 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1739130435 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207632055682 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663133171348 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465768360205 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119065104971 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049674876287 0.0645574589148 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.33 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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