Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We live in the age of technology. Every day new devices and gadgets are introduced into the marketplace. More importantly, a lot of developments has occurred in the field of sciences. As a result, parents who are worried about their children's future and also they want their children to be knowledgeable and skillful, pay a lot of attention to their kid's lessons, home works and grades. they may also reward their children with different gifts every time they get good marks in exams. Personally, according to following reasons and some of my personal experiences, I believe that it is essential for parents to encourage their children through various ways.
The first point to be mentioned is that nowadays due to the advancements in technology every one has access to different devices and gadgets such as laptops, smartphones and so on. Therefore, they spend a great amount of time in front of televisions or their smartphones. However, if students want to spend their time like this, they will definitely get tired and they would not have enough energy to study and to their school assignments. As a result, it is important that parents help their young children manage their tasks and also make time for studying. In fact, they can encourage youth by giving precious rewards.
Another reason that deserves some words is that some school children do not like to study after they are coming from school. What I mean is they believe that they have learned enough information in the class and there is no need for excessive studying. In this way, they start to do other thing rather than studying. In these conditions parents should be responsible to give these kids a motivation and a purpose. What I mean is that fathers and mothers can give a positive energy for these children through giving prize such as small amount of money so that these students start hardworking.
To sum up, based on the mentioned reasons it is essential for parents to encourage and motivate their children to study for their exams, through giving different rewards including a small amount of money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, i mean, in fact, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92067988669 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66732798686 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507082152975 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2592684781 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.176470588 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296310014949 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927905420546 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734855145765 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18721682496 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225680533333 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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