some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. do you think this is a good idea?
Since the dawn on civilization, education had a prominent role in the prosperity of every society. With keeping this in mind, parents tend to control their children grades to make sure they are doing well in school and they choose different approaches to encourage the children one of which is offering money for every high grade they get in school. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this fact, is whether offering money is a practical way which will result in more endeavor or not. As it is a moot point, there would not be a general agreement on this topic. However, personally, I rest on the belief that giving money will have positive consequences. In the following, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons to delineate my perspective.
One of the most, if not the only convincing reason, is that school-age children have not a great tendency toward studying. Therefore, they tend to do other activities, which they like most such as playing football, playing video games or spending time with their friends. Hence, parents have to find a way to encourage their young children in an effective manner and one of them is giving them money for every high grade they get. Offering money can motivate them to study harder. Broadly speaking, children are usually unaware of the consequences not studying in school. Thus, something practical have to be done by parents to help them have a good performance in school. To shed more light on this issue, I would like to mention the available statistics about this. According to statistic, school-age children with higher grades in school, had a better performance in college which is the main step for entering into career.
Another equally significant point which deserves some point here is that, through this money offering by parents as an motivating approach, children will learn how to manage the money they receive in the early ages and it has a positive repercussion in their future. Scientists believe that money managing should be learned in schools and since there is no particular education for this purpose, parents can take the control and educate their children themselves. However, there might be some exceptions, and those are when parents offer a hoard of money to their children and their children start to spend money on unnecessary activities.
In the light of the reasons explained, children should be encouraged for getting good grades and offering money is an effective manner. Not only this approach motivate children to study more and get ready for their future, but also they will learn money managing which has a significant role in their adult ages. That is why it is strongly recommended that parents motivate children with giving them extra money for their good grades in school.
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Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, broadly speaking, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01720430108 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64528892078 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464516129032 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6798866129 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.65 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.498511020347 0.236089414692 211% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154688055191 0.076458572812 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113728107269 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.355526232999 0.150856017488 236% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290960504323 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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