Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, where does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people say that planning out things in careful order eventually leads to great success. The question, at the sme time, is that whether to agree of disagree with this statement has been sparked spirited debate among people for long period of time. "Those who try to survive will die, and those who try to die will survive" said Lee-sunsin, one of a legendary general from the ancient Korean history. This quotes demonstrated that people who bear the risks will end up with more chance of survival, as well as the glory. And this is also the point that I am, to a huge extent, agree with. In the ensuing paragraph, I'll try to shed some lights on my perspective through ample exmaples and conspiuous reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned here firstly is that people who bear to take risks actually earn more chance of getting things right and easy. There is a research that shows this point of view. A group of researcher ran a kind of student-oriented cognitive test, figuring out whether people choose speed or correctneww when they are facing basic Wechler test. They ordered one group to take priority on the accuracy, and the other group on the speed. It turned out as a matter of fact the the accuracy betwen two groups did not show a significant difference, but the later group, who risked the accuracy over the chance of reaching as many questions as possible, solved abound 1/3 of more quetiones than the former group.
Another point here to be mentioned here is that sometimes it is crucial to grasp any chances that comes in your hand. My personal experience will explain why. Few years ago, I submitted to an art residency that was intended for a more advance artist. Though I was not skilled enough for the proposition, I decided to participate in the program. And that was a best grants that I have ever received until now, because there is not many of opportunities thesedays.
Although the aforementioned points are the first reasons to cross the mind at the first glance, it does not mean that they are the only oe. Actually, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. It should be noted that planning out things carefully does not alwasy garanty your success. On the contarary, it can lead to an unexpected disaster. Here comes nother case of my personal anecdote. Wheh I was a highschool student, I prepared for only one art university that I was admiring so much. I did everything I could for the entry, including adjusting my academic records right and at the same time preparing my painting skills. The result afterall was a failure, and I instantly lost my sense of direction about what to pursue and where to go further with my future career. (11:39_ 마지막 문단부터 시간 초과)
To make a long story short from all the about mentioned points and reasons, one can safely draw a conclusion that taking riskes and chances is crucial for one's success rather than planning out things in order.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...d spirited debate among people for long period of time. 'Those who try to survive will di...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
..., agree with. In the ensuing paragraph, Ill try to shed some lights on my perspecti...
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Message: The proper name in singular (Ill) must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
...ree with. In the ensuing paragraph, Ill try to shed some lights on my perspective t...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...getting things right and easy. There is a research that shows this point of view. A group ...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to speed'
Suggestion: to speed
...est, figuring out whether people choose speed or correctneww when they are facing bas...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
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Suggestion: the
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Message: Did you mean 'after all'?
Suggestion: after all
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, so, well, kind of, as a matter of fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72920696325 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58833587127 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549323017408 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8870289065 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.68 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142192056666 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351205005404 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469146693399 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0773224320893 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317624820721 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.