Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Young children need their parents consideration and more importantly their attention. Nowadays parents are most of the time in their work place and they spend a few amount of time with their children. As a result, people question what kind of activities these parents should do when they are with their kids. From my point of view, I think they should spend this time playing and having fun with their young children rather than paying attention to children's home works. I have two reasons for holding this opinion.
First of all, nowadays education has a better quality than it had 30 years ago. As a result, schools and teachers have an essential role in guiding students. In addition, thanks to the developments in the technology, students have various applications and soft wares in their smart phones and laptops respectively. In this way, they can have access to a huge amount of information in order to help them solve their problems in school assignments.
Second, young people are in need of their parents attention and their warm feelings. What I mean is, fathers and mothers should compensate the time when they are not at home. Therefore, when they are spending time with their kids they have to express more love and warm feeling to children. For instance they can play different games that their children love. In this way parents can speak more with their kids and more importantly listen to their concerns and thoughts.
In conclusion, parents should make time for their young children. In fact, younger generation have many concerns and ideas which they need to talk about them with someone. It is worth saying that it is more satisfying for youth that their mothers and fathers listen to their opinions rather than their friends. Moreover, considering the fact that there are various tools for helping students solve their problems related to their lessons, parents do not need to spend more time doing things related to home works. As a result, it is better for parents and children that they spend their time having fun with each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, i mean, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91977077364 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41023098251 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467048710602 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3399446725 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3684210526 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3684210526 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330883983564 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127015638467 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860736564822 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230453116582 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937206024407 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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