Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Undoubtedly, parents have an important influence on their children and spending time with children is the hobby for parents. If I was a busy father with a lot of works and I only have a short time to doing something with my kids, I prefer to doing things together that are related to schoolwork.

First, children can play games and sport with their friends and always children have a good time with them in the park and school. This is obvious that they have a lot of fun near their friends and usually they do not need parents to be a partner for plays. In my country children play together in the play garden and they are happy because they have a lot of friends. Playing a lot outside of the home lead them to want doing something different than games and sports with their parent such as doing homework, practicing or making some handmade stuff for school.
Second, School and study have a vital role in children future life and parents can help their kids with doing things related to the school work or answering their questions. Children that are supervised with their parent are successful in their schools. Thus, spending time with children for doing homework and assignment or other things that are associated with education is more valuable for children and their future. My sister and her husband are university professor and they have a sun that his name is Nima. They have a little time to spend with their kid. They focused on Nima’s schoolwork and they always try to his education and the result of these attempts is that he is the best student in the school and he was winner in the some competitions.
Third, the age of three to seven is the best time that parents play with children. Because playing alone in the garden for this children can be harmful and dangerous. And also they have no schoolwork to do so that would be logical if parents play with them in this period of time. Thus, for children that are in the school age working to things related to education and helping to homework can be very profitable. Each period of children life require especial and different type of parental behavior.
To put it in a nutshell, doing things to related school work for children that their parents have no plenty of time to spend with them is beneficial and rational.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'do'?
Suggestion: do
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Line 4, column 448, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... them to want doing something different than games and sports with their parent such...
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Line 5, column 743, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
... in the school and he was winner in the some competitions. Third, the age of three ...
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Line 6, column 123, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Line 6, column 265, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, third, thus, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62347188264 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38218359746 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.408312958435 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1333860759 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.055555556 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72222222222 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444725266735 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179088717192 0.076458572812 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945436731559 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.317564771081 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505967413062 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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