Some people like to do only what they like already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and take risk. Which one do you prefer?
To begin with, trying new things help us to learn new things and expand our knowledge. One of the most significant benefits of the trying new thing is that we learn many things and acquire variety kind of abilities. In addition, it helps us to find new interests which leads to blooming new talents. There is so famous expression in my –Iranian- culture which says “no one will not invent his talent, but try to find it by taking risk and doing new thins”. Two years ago, for instance, I started to work as a florist. Before I started this profession, I did not like it, but when I got some information about flowers, I started to enjoy this profession.
Furthermore, taking risk and starting to try new things expand our mind ability and helps to evaluate events efficiency. Experience generated as a result of taking risk and try for first time, which its importance is obvious for everyone. Experience will help us to make better decision in future when face with same situation. That is the reason why mention experience as a torch for future. According to the recent research which was done Michigan phycology institution (MPI), people who has more experience have better outcomes about finding solution for problems, in compare to people who have not tried different things in their life and suffer of experience shortage.
Some people prefer to do what they know well. Others, however, are adventure and try to take a risk and do new tasks. As I concerned, I prefer to do new things and learn many subjects. This essay will support my idea by providing some reasons in following paragraphs.
To sum up, from what I talked above, it can be draw clearly that learning new thing have more benefit than doing what just we know. I presented some reasons to indicate this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: OBVIOUS_FOR[1]
Message: The adjective obvious is normally used with 'to': 'obvious to everyone'.
Suggestion: obvious to everyone
...for first time, which its importance is obvious for everyone. Experience will help us to make better...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75241157556 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59715927471 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565916398714 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2859192921 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9411764706 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2941176471 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380640476559 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124759705976 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125374874777 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243954195427 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136066998261 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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