Some people place a high value on loyalty to the employer. To others, it is perfectly acceptable to change jobs to build a career. Discuss these two positions. Then indicate which position you agree and why.
Different cultures place varying values on loyalty to the employer. In some countries, most notably in Japan, there is a high degree of loyalty among employees. On the other hand, in western cultures high loyalty to one’s employer is not considered rational. In western countries it is common to change job once in a while in order to achieve more success in career path. Both views have advantages and disadvantages.
In cultures that value loyalty, a kind of family relationship seems to develop between employer and employee. For example in Japan employees do their best to improve companies which they are working in. Besides, employers are concerned with assisting the employees to develop their skills and knowledge. The negative aspect of absolute loyalty to employer is that the employees miss their chances to learn about new carrier directions and find positions in other companies which suit them better. From the employer’s point of view, not being able to hire new people which their skills match the needs of company better is a considerable limitation.
In cultures in which it is acceptable to change jobs every few years the employees are always looking for opportunities to improve their competencies. They even feel free to change their professional fields. They stay in one company as long as it is mutually beneficial to company and employee. Neither the employee nor the company has long-term commitment. The company also can replace the current employees with new individuals whenever is needed. The drawback of this system is high cost of losing good employees to the company.
Although both perspectives have its advantages and drawbacks, each of them may be preferable in certain cultures. In my point of view it is much better for the employees to have opportunity to change jobs in order to build perfect career path based on their personal choices.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, look, may, so, while, for example, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1461038961 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82644928622 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555194805195 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.173297176 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0555555556 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1111111111 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166569929671 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524358789183 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531051770482 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105497226856 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515217053675 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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