Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples

In order to feel fully accomplished in life, it is important that we have the support of friends and family as they are the ones closest to our heart. An individual's mentality, his surroundings and various other factors like his emotional status, his character everything is included to decide if he is more influenced by friends or family. But however, when we take into account of our career and future, it is our family who play a vital role in shaping a better life for us.

Firstly, our parents are the first teachers of our life. They help us in each stage of life and know us better than anyone. Admittedly, it is our family who is the most important influence because they are more elderly and have better knowledge and experienced which is why they are called as sophisticated. Hence, their direction will never go wrong in most of the cases.

Friends also play a vital role in our life. They are the ones with whom we have had the best times. Especially when stayed in hostel or a home away from home, our surroundings influence us the most. There are some situations like for instance, when away from home for studies in abroad we learn a lot by ourselves and our surroundings. But their influential on us may not be always the right. And when in difficulty it is our family who is always there for us. Friends come and go, but, family stays till the end of our life.

While speaking about western countries where the fact is entirely different compared to Asian children, are more likely influenced by their friends because of the busy life over there due to which parents have no time to advice their child to take the right decision. This has both positive and negativity. Although, In early age a person has the self confidence, decision making capability etc. it need not be always right, because of which they might drift aimlessly being not clear of what to do and what not to do. And that would not be the case when we have the guidance of our parents.

In conclusion, personally, I feel that young adults are influential of their surroundings and greatly influenced by family.

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Suggestion: now
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, speaking about

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63466666667 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56295107683 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.007133182 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141980664868 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427456347025 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423016960743 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896905899244 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179502161406 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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