technology has made children less creative than they were in the past?
Whether the technology has a good impact on children or not is controversial. Some people believe that technology is beneficial for young people. On the other hand, other people think that technology destroyed the creativity of children. In my opinion, technology has a bad impact on children intelligence. I fell this way for two main reasons which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, children has an easy access to the information and knowledge due to the evolution in the technology,specifically the internet.This easy gain of knowledge lowers their needs to thinks about different ideas and concepts. Moreover rather than sitting and thinking for explanation of different phenomena or events that they notice, they will easily search for the answer over the internet. For example, if you ask your child what is the best way to make a bicycle. What do think he will do?. For sure, rather than trying to imagine and figure out the design of the bicycle, he will just watch a video on Youtube that shows how to build a bicycle. For that, I really think that technology destroyed children abilities to think about different ideas.
Secondly, Most children spend a lot of the time playing video games rather than studying. As a result they do not understand different subjects that they study in the schools. Moreover, after children get addicted on playing video games they will stop studying or spend less time study. And they will spend most of the time in front the computer screen. As result they are becoming lazy to do any thing other than playing video games. My real experience is good example of this. I remember when I was around 10 years old. I was spending around 10 hour daily playing GTA game. As a result, I got a very low marks on different subjects. Also when mu mother was asking me to go and purchase some items, I was answer I will go later. If I used used the time to study rather than playing I would definitely achieved higher marks. For that I think that technology has a bad impacts on children school marks and on their behavior.
To sum up, I agree with the idea that technology has a bad impact on children intelligence abilities. This because the ease access to information without any need to think, and technology brought video games which wasted children time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76309226933 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71710609485 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493765586035 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9660330959 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.04 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.96 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235840551607 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696756705739 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058742261229 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150002909405 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343808699615 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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