What do students suppose to do in colleges? This question is the key to answer whether sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal activities. I think college students should focus on study, so classes and libraries are more important than sports and social activities. My argumentation is based on the purpose of college, the future of students and the financial arrangement in college.
First of all, college is a place for students to study knowledge, so classes and libraries are necessary and very important. For example, students can learn from professors in classes. Without classes, it's hard for students to get to know professors, let alone to learn something from them. Also, students can learn from books, which are stored in libraries. In my university, I like to sit in classes and get information from my professor, and at the same time, I enjoy reading in libraries, which help me a lot too. On the other hand, even though sports and social activities are parts of lives in college, they are not the center issues in college. After graduation, students can continue their sports and social activities easily, but it's so difficult to sit in class and library again.
Furthermore, the promising future of college students relies on the knowledge that they learn from classes and libraries. We live in modern society, which asks people to work with good talent, so students need the expertise to find a job and to be a successful person. One of my classmates who achieved excellent results in college now is a billionaire, whose success is a proof of what I just said. Without learning at classes and libraries, even students are very good at sports and social activities, they hardly can succeed.
At last, the financial support of college is limited, more finance should be distributed to classes and libraries other than sports and social activities. Every college has its budget every year, and it should be used efficiently. For instance, my university pays 80% money to classes and libraries, in order to improve the quality of professors and books. In contrast, if my university spends half of money to sports and social activities, we don't have enough money to make classes and libraries better.
In conclusion, for the sake of educating college students, and make sure they can benefit from the education, we should pay more attention to classes and libraries, and also spend more money to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97590361446 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74324411969 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465060240964 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6053274811 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.25 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207798930023 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753024206353 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771976981104 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131411924933 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800301861273 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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