TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

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TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

By and large, There is no doubt that nowadays, educational institution plays a pivotal role in people’s future lives. No one can deny the influence of education on our private life. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is how to split the financial support among different parts of a university. some people may hold this viewpoint that it is better to allocate most of the financial support to classes and libraries to enhance student’s knowledge in their field of study. However, some others may take an opposite view and believe that universities budget should equally allocate between sports, social activities and classes, sports. As for this writer opinion, I do not subscribe to this idea. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reason to substantiate my viewpoint.

The first compelling reason corroborating my stance is that people enter to the university in order to reach deep knowledge in their field of study and they want to prepare themselves for getting an appropriate job in the future life. students should focus on their lesson and course, and in this regard, they need suitable classes and libraries. it is crystal clear that one of the prominent problems in the university is no using of proper apparatus in classes and also, inadequate books in the libraries. it is vital that universities allocate most of the budget for improving the quality of classes and libraries because parents select a university by the university educational equipment, not sporting equipment. As a case in point when I wanted to choose my university, I was looking for a university with good libraries equipped with up-to-date apparatus and pleasant library space. because the university and education were not my final goal and that was a temporary bridge between high school and getting a job. students only wanted to prepare themselves for the future by enhancing their knowledge and practical experience in the classes.

Furthermore, A survey conducted by experts from oxford university shows that over 90% of people use another place to have sport and social activities. Indeed, parents want to separate education from other ingredients. they believe that sport and social activities in the university could distract the student from the main goal. To illustrate that idea, let’s consider the following example. one of my friends was studying at a university with high-level sports equipment’s. he always filled his time by sports in the university like swimming, soccer, tennis and so on. finally, he got low score in his courses, and the university fired up him from the institution. this example clearly illustrates my point

The main conclusion to be drawn from this article is that the universities should spend most of the budget on enhancing educational elements and factors. To put it briefly, I firmly contend that by evaluating the merits and demerits of the idea, not only it be recognized as an evidence-based, but also it can be accepted speculatively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, as for, in conclusion, no doubt, by and large

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2557.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19715447154 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98175857993 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510162601626 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 814.5 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.282680616 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.173913043 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3913043478 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78260869565 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170305322125 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484516147657 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422251448647 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970556563236 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399179146376 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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