One of the serious issues human beings are now facing is air pollution and environmental problems. Some believe that there will be more cars in twenty years later. Others, on the other hand, have the opposite viewpoint, believing that there will be fewer automobiles in the streets in the near future. I am of the latter opinion, supporting that because of the effect of technology on reduction of cars’ number and the associated environmental issues if the number will not decrease.
To start with, technology has resulted in producing advanced automobiles and airplanes, and online communication software which has been reduced the number of required cars since 50 years ago. Nowadays, there are an increase trend in using airplanes as the means of transport. Even for short distances such as 200 kilometres, people prefer to commute by airplanes compared the lengthy use of cars. Moving by airplane is more comfortable and time-saving compared to automobiles. Furthermore, Internet and advanced online communication software, such as Skype, have eased communication and have caused a reduction of unnecessary face-to-face meetings. This has gone a long way towards reduction of automobiles in streets, the trend which will be continued for twenty years later. Another important factor, is a change in the style of jobs in the future compared to now. In twenty years, it is estimated that most of jobs will be done online and it is not required for the employees to be present at their workplace. Instead, they will enjoy sitting in their cosy houses and perform their work by their laptops. This trend currently can also be seen in some field such as survey engineers who designed their plan at their home. As all these explanations show, technology will contribute to a decrease in number of cars in street in the near future.
In addition, our beautiful Earth is now facing some environmental issues which one of the solutions will be reducing number of cars. According to the scientific research, one of the elements which has contributed to the global warming is methane which is the emission gas from cars. The global warming has brought about an increase in oceans' temperature and the globe which will melt the polar ice and consequently will cause the catastrophic events such as flooding, Tsunami and having intolerable hot temperatures. Therefore, governments want to enforce more restrictions on using private cars and would encourage people to commute by public transportations. Through subsidies and providing free or very cheap public transportation, citizens are convinced to use buses to reduce their carbon footprint which will reduce the particulate matters. This policy will go a long way towards reducing the number of cars, resulting a reduction of air pollution in the future. Accordingly, there was an international seminar in Paris in 2015 where all of political leader were gathered to address the global warming issue. This kind of meeting will help to reduce number of private cars.
In conclusion, I personally think that in twenty years there will be fewer private vehicles and more public transport systems attributed to the advance technology and environmental problems. Internet and online communication programs will cause a decrease in the cars’ number in the streets. This trend will be encouraged by governments by funding public transport systems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'trends'?
Suggestion: trends
...rs ago. Nowadays, there are an increase trend in using airplanes as the means of tran...
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Line 3, column 907, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the jobs') or simply say ''most jobs''.
Suggestion: most of the jobs; most jobs
.... In twenty years, it is estimated that most of jobs will be done online and it is not requi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2865.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 545.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25688073394 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95587958811 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475229357798 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 894.6 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9608325815 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.192307692 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9615384615 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154524867986 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498343558069 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440241958737 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117328792261 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347176247337 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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