Nowadays, there is an impressive development in science and technology. Considering as a part of this world, every human must adapt to this developed cycle. So everybody must sacrifice himself/herself to contribute in the development of the world. In my opinion, the opposite sentence is true for today’s life. In fact, people have to sacrifice all of their enjoyment for the work that they should do.
First, according to the terrible economic conditions and the job deficiencies, today people adapt themselves to every kind of job that is found for them even if it is not their preferences. They have to do the obligated job every day. So how can they spend too much time on their enjoyment with a boring job? For example, I found a part time job in a car company. I’m so frustrated with my work but I have to do that job because of just money. So I couldn’t spend my time on my enjoyment because of current conditions.
Second, if everybody concentrates just on his/her enjoyment, how it is possible to have this huge progress in today’s technology. For example, my cousin is a successful scientist in biology and he works from 6 A.M until 6 P.M. when he came back to his home, he is so tired and couldn’t enjoy his time by spending with his family. So he sacrifices himself for his work that he should do. It is almost true for other members of society.
To sum up, I believe that we spend too much time in our work rather than enjoying our life. In fact, the conditions of life have limited us to live in this way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 337, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...h a boring job? For example, I found a part time job in a car company. I'm so frust...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: M
...entist in biology and he works from 6 A.M until 6 P.M. when he came back to his ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for example, in fact, kind of, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79496402878 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01542924291 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543165467626 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.7153931257 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2142857143 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196745384099 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762810125951 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701235486922 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120323691741 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396835420767 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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