TPO 08_ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO 08_ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In seeking to see the potential impacts of television advertisement on children, we first need to determine what is meant by advertisements. Advertisement can be any message that the TV is trying to convey to its potential audience, be it directly through commercial ads or the hidden messages in different programs. Using this definition, I subscribe to the view that TV ads can by times be destructive to children, and hence, it shouldn't be directed toward them.

To begin with, young children (2 to 5-year-old) are spending the most critical years in their entire lives; The learn everything quickly and form their very first memories. The memories formed at these ages are prone to have enormous impacts in child's whole life. Some movies, for instance, depict genius children that are superior to their peers and are aberrant, which is portrayed to be an admired trait. In the real life, however, not many people of this kind exist, and the few existing number are not socially accepted. Moreover, no one is truly a genius; so, if a child has high expectations of himself and feels like he has to be the best, this would let him down in later stages of life when he does not succeed in every field.

Additionally, having watched TV ads, children's attentions may foster asking for things, or getting involved in activities which are in fact detrimental to their health. Take a child who has watched the Jimmy Neutron cartoon as an example; The child may endanger her life by trying to do the same experiment at home. Another example could be a child who has watched the commercial advertisement of snacks, she insists on buying them, while they may be unhealthy, or contain specific ingredients that do not fit the child's diet.

To sum up, despite the fact that children can learn much from the movies designed for their ages, I believe that TV advertisements do more harm than good.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, as to, for instance, in fact, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82769230769 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72637957044 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618461538462 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.9389165308 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.75 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0833333333 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15870344558 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560050457522 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384553503791 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914293093517 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350197343537 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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