Television advertisements play an important role in TV programs and audiences, young and old, watch them frequently. From my point of view, I disagree with the idea that young children who aged from two to five should be precluded from watching television advertisements. I will present reasons for my opinion in the following paragraph.
To begin with, television advertisements wield no adverse influence on young child; therefore, there is no reason to prevent children from watching advertisments on TV. Advertisements are media materials for companies to advertise their products. Videos of advertisements on TV contain no inappropriate or provoketive information, which impacts young children. My own experience is an apposite example. I enjoyed watching TV a lot when I was young, because I was fascinated with the dynamic picture from TV. I have a great time in my childhood, watching TV as a hobby, and I received little negative influence from advertisement. Other children also enjoyed watching TV while periodic advertisement included in it.
Furthermore, it is unreasonable to prevent young child from watching advertisement from TV. TV programs are designed for general audiences. If there is apparent undesirable influence of advertisement to young children, the onus of preventing child from watching advertisements lies on parents. That means parents must supervise their children watching TV and turn off the TV when an advertisement is on, which is irrational. First, parents do not have time to oversight their children when they are watching TV. Second, it is impossible for parents to relax because parents need to rest while their child is watching TV. Thus, it is absurd to prevent children from watching advertisement.
To summarize, I oppose the proposal that television advertisement should be excluded from be watching by young children. One reason is that advertisements have no adverse impact on young children, and another reason is that it is absurd to do so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39297124601 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30921637913 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482428115016 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4224207035 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8421052632 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4736842105 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184736821981 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753693428891 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641238199716 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16662824779 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718652491752 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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