Nowadays, the TV set is a common appliance in a house, and there are many families possessing more than one TV sets. By the time people enjoy all kinds of program, coming along with them are a diversity of advertisements. Are those commercials targeting at young children good for them? From my perspective, the television advertising ought to be banned on the screen. I would like to put forward some of the most important reasons to illustrate my standpoint.
First of all, the preschoolers are not mature enough to tell if what they see is concert with the truth. The toy companies invariably try their best to make their products look far much better in the commercial so as to gain a profit from those toys. However, the children, at this stage, easily believe what they see and hear. To some degree, those toys companies are taking advantage of children’s feature, immature, to reach their goal on the market.
In addition, as a matter of fact, children are actually utilized to put pressure on their parents by those companies when the companies publicize their products to the young children. For instance, given their parents turn down to buy them an overstated toy, the children will use their weapon, tears and cries, to make their parents step back and surrender. Otherwise, the tension will show up in the family.
Last but not least, it is the parents who will ultimately pay for those fancy commercials. Raising children is money consuming. For example, in some countries, the parents have to start saving for children’s future college education as long as their baby comes out on this world. Otherwise, they will have a predictable economic crisis when their children begin further education in college. Moreover, during the children growth, parents have to shop lot of toys for them, from baby rattle to doll house or toy train rail. If the price of those merchandise can drop somewhat, it will do parents a big favor from long run.
Be summing up, the television advertisements aiming at the preschoolers should not appear on the screen, since it can be helpful for families’ harmony and finance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 211, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... look far much better in the commercial so as to gain a profit from those toys. However,...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'so', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'as a matter of fact', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248803827751 0.229887763892 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.138755980861 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0574162679426 0.0866891130778 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0574162679426 0.046263068375 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.055023923445 0.0685040099705 80% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107655502392 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0263157894737 0.0351676179071 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79125065999 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0358851674641 0.0309702414327 116% => OK
Particles: 0.00956937799043 0.00188951952338 506% => OK
Determiners: 0.102870813397 0.0887237588012 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0239234449761 0.0209618222197 114% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011961722488 0.0139019557991 86% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2129.0 2387.08602151 89% => OK
No of words: 360.0 408.028673835 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.91388888889 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.322222222222 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252777777778 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.183333333333 0.174417080927 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130555555556 0.112833075102 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79125065999 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.524397521467 110% => OK
Word variations: 66.0571540687 59.2087087015 112% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.9473684211 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4694748341 48.84282405 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.052631579 120.699889404 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.736842105263 0.644075263715 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 44.2251461988 45.7405998639 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.52380952381 1.45489161554 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223050821977 0.300154397459 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0974743122585 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0796997173088 0.0752933317313 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.510410391704 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17699740844 0.151897553556 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860819239992 0.114077575197 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046069343278 0.0781384742642 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.345867002639 0.336927656856 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.112957043807 0.067059652881 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151130228381 0.210909579961 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213577490289 0.0618886996521 35% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.