TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are certain considerations or factors which everyone can take into account to investigate and examine the impact of the technology on children. I certainly do not agree the technology has made kids less inventive. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.

Firstly, modern technology comes to contribute children to realize their imagination. These days, the world alters swiftly and all human experience a huge enhancement and achievement in variety fields of science and engineering. These technical and practical progresses in the area of the education assist children to be more innovative and also implement their thinking and idea easily. School age children now can go to the modern libraries or laboratories and use digital computers and other high tech gadgets to attempt and make real their imagination.

Furthermore, promoting the efficiency of the educational process is another noticeable reason. In the past, learning procedure depended on the classic and less efficient methods and instruments like teacher based classes or printed materials. In that circumstance, school age children had to waste a lot of energy to comprehend their lessons, and therefore there was no any power or possibly incentive for creativity. In the contrast, these days, advanced technology boost and flourish the efficiency of the learning process. For example, children can use internet connection to surf different scientific and news websites to grasp all hidden aspects of a subject, and so find a new innovative way easily.

Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that technology harms children's creativity. Chiefly, modern technologies waste children’s time or bring their attention away from useful and inventive activities. For instance, children prefer to devote their energy for computer games which are about bank robbery or gun firing. However, I still affirm that technology contributes people to be more innovative. Although technology has some flaws and deflects, it can be neglected. Plus, there are dozens of educational computer games that are aimed to extend children's creativity in different aspects of management, strategy, or business.

Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that modern inventions aid and abet children to be more genius or productive. Participation of realization and effectiveness are two prime and conspicuous supports.

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Average: 8 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... their lessons, and therefore there was no any power or possibly incentive for cre...
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Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r or possibly incentive for creativity. In the contrast, these days, advanced tech...
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Line 5, column 680, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovative'.
Suggestion: innovative
...den aspects of a subject, and so find a new innovative way easily. Admittedly, there are so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59466666667 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13216999681 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602666666667 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.909778505 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9047619048 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140830040674 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428263295824 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442360564359 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755555693095 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354014607188 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Although technology has some flaws and deflects, it can be neglected.
Description: 'it' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.

flaws:
Don't repeat words, phrases and sentences. for example, 'contribute' is repeated several times.

I still affirm that technology contributes people to be more innovative.
I still affirm that technology contributes children to be more innovative.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 2037 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.432 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.008 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.964 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.275 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.502 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.019 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5