TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We are living in the twenty-first century, an era of the modern technological innovations. These technological innovations have changed our life. Although some believe that our life has affected negatively, I strongly think that technology has affected our life positively and it has made the children more creative and productive. In my view, technological innovations have helped the children in the following ways to learn more and to do creative endeavors of their interests.

Firstly, Knowledge is the base of creation and today technology provides tons of resources to get the latest knowledge and information to put the ideas into various new ways. The digital revolution has clearly produced a large number of innovative products and services like the internet, computer, search engines, iPhones, various apps, and applications. Hence, more resources and viewpoints than ever before are now within reach of most of the people, including children to get the more knowledge and information, and the exposure to novel ideas and concepts can lead to enhanced creativity. For example, making of different types of robots for various purposes by children interested in science and technology has become popular nowadays. Younger children use household items to build robots to get fun, with very limited features that are limited to what their imagination can come up with, while older students focus on more challenging tasks such as designing, building, electronics, and programming.

Secondly, availability of various tools of technology has triggers creativity of children that has helped to develop creative thinking and other essential skills. Today children are writing blogs and making audio-video presentations. Blogs are just one example of how technology is enhancing creativity. The idea of a blog is to share thoughts on any wide range of topics, typing out blogs is a way to creatively develop a piece of writing, and then be able to showcase the piece for others to read and maybe even help in sparking creativity in a reader. Children can create their own videos and share them with their class, which can be a great opportunity for them to develop their creative skills. Today, children are making very attractive powerpoint presentations on the subjective topics and sharing their views with teachers and peers, this creative method was not prevalent few decades before when technology was not advanced. So, this way technology has provided ground to children to express their views, thoughts, and talents in a creative manner.

Thirdly, although technology is helping children to learn more and to be more creative, there are some ways that new technological resources like the internet takes them away from new ideas and destroys their creativity. For example, many students write down the summary of any topic or subject from the internet instead of reading the full topic or book, without understanding the matter. Today, in math class children use a calculator to do the simple calculations whereas in past in the absence of such device, children were using their brain ideas and creativity to solve the problems. Hence, excessive dependency on technology makes children dumb and less creative.

Finally, there are lots of good things about technology that encourage children to bring out their hidden artistic skills to generate novel, useful ideas and to implement those ideas successfully to make new innovations and thereby enhance children’s creativity.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, while, for example, such as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2958.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38797814208 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89983043631 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 924.3 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.8687144422 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.857142857 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201835743287 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666308821431 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039535937291 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114998326668 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328125340769 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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