TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, technology has become integral part of our life. Some people would argue that technology has made children less creative, while others may consider the opposite point of view. In my opinion, Technology has enhanced the creativity of the new generation. I will explore the reasons for my stance in the following lines.

First of all, technical developments provided variety of techniques and tools that improved the educational process. Inventions, such as the computers and internet, supplied us with unprecedented tools to improve the critical thinking skills of our youngsters. For example, video games can be used not only for pleasure, but also for exploring the world of imagination. Moreover, it assisted teachers to deliver information in appealing ways, which attract the attention of their students. In addition, the unlimited technological tools enabled pupils with learning difficulties to effectively pace their studying according to their needs and abilities. Many research published demonstrated that the leap in technology made a world of difference in educational system. It is beyond the shadow of doubt that the institutions that blended leaning with technology achieved significant progress in the level of their students.

Furthermore, the technology provided countless sources of knowledge, such as, novels and scientific fiction books, on the internet. All genres of art and books can be access through the internet, which was impossible in the past. This vast world of knowledge and joy is at the disposal of our children. All they need is a computer and internet connection, which is available to the majority of kids around the world. As a result, the adults of this era exploring and investigating a wide range of information, which widen their perspectives. All these factors combined together to make the children more creative and imaginative. For instance, I had a discussion with my niece who is only 10 years old about her last reading.To my surprise, she started talking about our galaxy, planets, stars and the sun. She explained how our universe works in a systematic and magnificent way. When I asked her about the source of her information, her reply was " The internet". That is a vivid example of how the advance in technology pushes forward the young people to be more creative and knowledgeable.

To recap, I assert that technology is stimulates the creativity and takes it beyond the horizon. That is due to the fact that it improved the quality of the educational methods and supplies us with unlimited easy-access sources of knowledge.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Much research; A good deal of research
...according to their needs and abilities. Many research published demonstrated that the leap in...
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...rogress in the level of their students. Furthermore, the technology provided cou...
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Suggestion: To
...nly 10 years old about her last reading.To my surprise, she started talking about ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, talking about, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30193236715 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05432179938 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562801932367 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2367022747 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4347826087 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17391304348 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13734758491 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386927457934 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305178615461 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088766829051 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343125570085 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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