TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In my opinion technology not only create more convenient life but also increase creativity in people especially children. Some people may suggest some disputable concern for negative affects of technology on children creativity but i thinks if we select what programs and technology be allowable for children is the most important factor that determine affects.
First, there are so many technology which can be used to create new things and invent new machine and tools. Using some modern medias such as computer and software to learn and improving children is the best example for this claim. In the pat most children didn't received any education until interring college or university but today there are so many advanced technology which help them. For an example parent can purchased some software in DVD form and install on computer and laptop. Some of these software have complex menu with a variety of useful creativity strengthening method, mind developing challenging, thinking ability improving and so on.
Second there are so many science and educating online magazines which every person can using them to improve their knowledge about the newest invention. Parents and teachers can use these online resources to guide children in a correct direct.For example, a website named child creativity educate parents about how behave with their children to strength creativity. There are also so many poem, music, software and stories to stimulate children mind ability.
Finally, technology now days is everywhere and world without technology isn't imaginable. One places which advanced technology and tools are used is school. Statistics shows that those countries using high technology tools in their schools have more intelligent creative students even in elementary levels. For an example, in united states students can build stem cells or robot. After that, student will have more strength mind and thinking ability.All this are result of using technology in education.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'i' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...technology on children creativity but i thinks if we select what programs and technolo...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...portant factor that determine affects. First, there are so many technology whic...
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Line 2, column 23, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun technology seems to be countable; consider using: 'many technologies'.
Suggestion: many technologies
...termine affects. First, there are so many technology which can be used to create new things ...
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Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...or this claim. In the pat most children didnt received any education until interring ...
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Line 2, column 497, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this software' or 'these softwares'?
Suggestion: this software; these softwares
...install on computer and laptop. Some of these software have complex menu with a variety of use...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'i think', 'such as', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.296511627907 0.229887763892 129% => OK
Verbs: 0.156976744186 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0988372093023 0.0866891130778 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0581395348837 0.046263068375 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0174418604651 0.0685040099705 25% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.104651162791 0.118717715034 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0581395348837 0.0351676179071 165% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69840650251 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0116279069767 0.0309702414327 38% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0755813953488 0.0887237588012 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0174418604651 0.0209618222197 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0232558139535 0.0139019557991 167% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1023.0 2387.08602151 43% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 162.0 408.028673835 40% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.31481481481 5.86048508987 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 4.48200974243 80% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.432098765432 0.338922669872 127% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.333333333333 0.251872472559 132% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.246913580247 0.174417080927 142% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.148148148148 0.112833075102 131% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69840650251 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 212.727598566 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.679012345679 0.524397521467 129% => OK
Word variations: 69.3754550132 59.2087087015 117% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6684587814 34% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 23.1428571429 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3728319322 48.84282405 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.142857143 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.42857142857 0.644075263715 222% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.5376344086 44% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 56.4761904762 45.7405998639 123% => OK
Elegance: 1.975 1.45489161554 136% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165800887697 0.300154397459 55% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0909555864156 0.103427244359 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0402244908038 0.0752933317313 53% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.537613371359 0.497263757937 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122174564962 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826423869613 0.114077575197 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269811116126 0.0781384742642 35% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.252848271598 0.336927656856 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0 0.067059652881 0% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132332162168 0.210909579961 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149952474638 0.0618886996521 24% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 13.6433691756 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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