TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I strongly agree with this statement that children should not be allowed to play computer games. The main thing is that they become addicted to playing games and put them apart from real worlds.

First, playing computer games affect children`s mindset. Moreover, games have a variety of disadvantage especialy for younger kids. They may become nervous and violent. In case of losing the game which play for an hour and then fighting with their parent. Also, children could not learn how to communicate with others and find a friend. Therefore, they feel anxious about their situation.

Second, some of them can have difficulty in concentrating their school`s lessons, because they would like to continue their playing. So, it has negative effects on their focusing of each invidual. For instance, our neighbor`s child has been playing games for several hours each day, and his mother complain about his charecter. Moreover, he has not compelete his final exams in fourth grade.

last but not least, children should learn a variety of important lesson from society and learn how to solve a solution. That`s why I highly recommend my children to avoid put a lot of effort on playing games.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hey feel anxious about their situation. Second, some of them can have difficulty...
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Suggestion: Last
...ete his final exams in fourth grade. last but not least, children should learn a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, apart from, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1022.0 1977.66487455 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 197.0 407.700716846 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18781725888 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69641115199 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649746192893 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 618.680645161 47% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1999615599 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.0 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0714285714 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214025291814 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768877379465 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951746982218 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150070425313 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102509373771 0.0645574589148 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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