Video games is now enjoyed by people young and old, and people have contravisial views toward them. From my point of view, I disagree with the idea that playing video games is a waste of time and children must be forbad from playing them. I will express my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, video game, just like other games, is a means of entertainment. People play games for fun and relaxation, so do players of computer games. For example, some people relax by playing online games after finishing work in office to relieve stress from work, just like others play basketball with friends after work. Of couse, playing games requires time, but it is not a waste of time. People should not stigmatize computer games and deem it is a waste of time.
Moreover, video game benefites childing in developing quick responce. In playing plane fight simulator games, children need to dodge fires and planes in precarious situation. By playing those video games, children practice their quick responce, which is important in their formative years. Back in my childhood, classmates who were fast in thinking also good at computer game, and they gain better grades in study than other peers. Therefore, children should not be prohibited from play video games.
In conclusion, I oppose the suggestion that children should be excluded from playing computer games because it is a waste of time. I believe that computer games are just like other games that bring joy to players and it also bring benefits to children who play them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...s that bring joy to players and it also bring benefits to children who play them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 260.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94615384615 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4662335032 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526923076923 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1905769995 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7333333333 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329144298546 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134522960047 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841742471714 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226968205287 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049417838525 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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