TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

The majority of people who are in their early to mid-twenties think that the there are many problems created from access to much information from the Internet. They support that in the Internet, there are a lot of information which is harmful to children. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be thought in a different light. I believe that the Internet is beneficial for people to get a lot of valuable information. This is because they are able to broaden their perspectives and relieve stress.
First of all, people are able to get a lot of valuable information from the Internet which enables them to broaden their perspectives. To be specific, using the Internet provides people to get valuable information which as a result enables them to better understand other cultures, lifestyle, and build a quality life. As modern society is becoming increasingly, globalized today’s world requires people with a strong understanding of international views. People can do this better by using internet. To illustrate, Steve Jobs, who is the founder of Apple, made great accomplishments in his life time. I read online that he was very successful because he was global minded and culturally sensitive. He did this by achieving valuable information with the Internet. Therefore, this proves that it is beneficial for people to get a lot of valuable information from the Internet because they are able to broaden their perspectives.
In addition, using the Internet enables people to relieve their stress and restore health. To be specific, utilizing the Internet allows people to enjoy a better quality of life which makes them to manage stress and maintain health. Stress is the main cause of disease, shorter life span, and dissatisfying life in general. As such, people in modern society should find ways to reduce stress and stay healthy. For example, when I was in elementary school, I had a lot of assignments from the school. It makes me go to the library many times. At that time, it was very stressful because if there was the Internet at that time, I was able to find what I want to get in several seconds and save time to do other activities; however, it was not. Through this experience, I realized that using the Internet is beneficial for people to lead a healthy and fulfilling life.
To sum up, I believe that the Internet is beneficial for people to get a lot of valuable information : helping them broaden perspectives and relieve stress. all things mentioned, it is my belief that this argument regarding this topic has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons I have mentioned above.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 596, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...pple, made great accomplishments in his life time. I read online that he was very success...
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Line 4, column 157, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...roaden perspectives and relieve stress. all things mentioned, it is my belief that ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in general', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214428857715 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.188376753507 0.158761421928 119% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100200400802 0.0866891130778 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0240480961924 0.046263068375 52% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0661322645291 0.0685040099705 97% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114228456914 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0340681362725 0.0351676179071 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87582304603 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0501002004008 0.0309702414327 162% => OK
Particles: 0.00200400801603 0.00188951952338 106% => OK
Determiners: 0.0861723446894 0.0887237588012 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0060120240481 0.0209618222197 29% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0160320641283 0.0139019557991 115% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2655.0 2387.08602151 111% => OK
No of words: 447.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93959731544 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.373601789709 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.279642058166 0.251872472559 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187919463087 0.174417080927 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123042505593 0.112833075102 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87582304603 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429530201342 0.524397521467 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.0544978441 59.2087087015 79% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.4347826087 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1504641221 48.84282405 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.434782609 120.699889404 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4347826087 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 47.3989884253 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.30215827338 1.45489161554 90% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383456168112 0.300154397459 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129704049186 0.103427244359 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108543024781 0.0752933317313 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.485932497253 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153314182477 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155183807076 0.114077575197 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876600667858 0.0781384742642 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.491830622551 0.336927656856 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0973234180877 0.067059652881 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28942937775 0.210909579961 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496615447411 0.0618886996521 80% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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