TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Humankind seeks for travel to variety of new places, while some of the people prefer to travel to their own country than other countries in differenet continent. In my opinion, I believe that traveling in our own country has advantageous. So, I feel this way for two main reasons.

First, having a trip to our own country can help us to to become familiar with a lot of delicious food which belongs to specific regions, especially, the rural part because of the organic vegetables which grew in mountains part. As for me, I have lived in the spacious country that has interesting landscapes in the north part. During the winter season, I had visited the rural part of my country and had a meal which I had not ever tasted. Also, some of the foods had been made from organic vegetables and fresh meat becuase of that they had a unique lifestyle to having a healthy body.

Second, people who lived in my country has a variety of accents which is one thing that we can know by communicating. As I said above, during my trip to the north part, I made some new friends in the rural region. They speak in differnet accent, which I could not understand some of the words becuase of different pronunciation. Also, they were friendly and communicative, I have been invited by one of the families that they lived in the wooden house.That was a great hospitality from the people that I had known them for short term.

In conclusion, traveling in our own country is the way to grasp new things such as tasting flavorful foods and learning new accent. I strongly believe that each person should visit her own country.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
... travel to variety of new places, while some of the people prefer to travel to their own co...
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Message: Use simply 'winter'.
Suggestion: winter
...ng landscapes in the north part. During the winter season, I had visited the rural part of my cou...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...meal which I had not ever tasted. Also, some of the foods had been made from organic vegeta...
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Suggestion: some
...et accent, which I could not understand some of the words becuase of different pronunciatio...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...ies that they lived in the wooden house.That was a great hospitality from the people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, while, as for, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61111111111 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60266623442 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513888888889 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9315586708 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.153846154 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150027256509 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558232183104 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590297748465 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101804991443 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058552467773 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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