TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.

In the world, a myriad variety of the place for traveling. Every person wants to travel the whole world but it is not possible. From my perspective view, I refute the statement that people get the more advantage to traveling in their own country than traveling to other countries because of the foreign country give the new experience, knowledge of the various culture and interesting views.
To begin with, every person has a dream to traveling the specific place of the country. The person is mostly traveling in their own country but foreign country tours give the mysterious environment and scenes which are the person see only the imaginary and picture but real experience is feeling different from the imagination. For instance, last year i went the Bali with my husband on honeymoon, I have no word for about the location because of beach and sight scenes are fascinating for me. I have never seen before and it differs from my country beaches and ambiances.
Furthermore, since childhood, a person learn their culture and celebrate the festival and ceremonial event and he has knowledge about their culture. Traveling abroad countries give the knowledge of the variety of the culture of each place. It is the opportunity to a person that learn the foreign language and meet a foreigner and make friends. For example, one month ago, my brother went Canada with their friend, he was making a new friend in the Canada and it helps to improve their English language.
Moreover, a person feels tedious to travel of the own country place but abroad traveling feel the energetic, exciting and pleasure than traveling to the own country. My parents every year travel the different country and enjoy their life because of they traveled the many places of the India so feel boring and they decide the every year travel new countries it helps to rejuvenate energy.
In conclusion, traveling to an own country is beneficial when a person does not travel any place of their country but traveling the foreign country is huge benefit such as gain the knowledge of the different culture, a marvellous experience of the each place and feel energetic. I suggest that if a person has wealthier than he should traveling the new countries because of life is too short, so enjoy the each and every moments.

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Average: 6.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 352, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...he imagination. For instance, last year i went the Bali with my husband on honeym...
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Line 6, column 238, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
... different country and enjoy their life because of they traveled the many places of the India s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91379310345 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59361009357 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426108374384 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.7997263348 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6875 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323315649543 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136318828504 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132259686762 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248305881343 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146396883984 0.0645574589148 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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