Travelling is one of the most enjoyable activities in life. I do not agree with the statement that people benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries. I think the opposite is true for the reasons I am going to explore in the following lines.
To begin with, travelling abroad will help you to learn and know about other cultures and traditions. Some people travel only for joy, while others are interested in knowing and communicating with people in other cultures. Such kind of journeys help to widen your perspective, see and examine things from different point of view. Moreover, it gives you a great opportunity to communicate with humans who have different traditions and customs. Is there anything more exciting than that?!, It also fosters your understanding for the diverse universe that we are living in. For instance, I follow a group of adventurous traveler on Facebook who writes and shares his precious moments in many amazing places in the world. No only the pretty natural areas, but the habits, festivals and and traditions of these diverse nations. I hope I can travel like him someday in the near future.
Furthermore, Travelling outside your country can help you to learn other languages. It has been always said that the most effective way to learn any language is to live in the native country of this language, you will learn and enjoy your education. In fact, you will not even notice that you are developing your level in this new language, simply because you will learn by dealing with people in the normal daily activities. In today's world, it crucial to master more than one language to be able to get a good job, and the best way to achieve that is to increase your exposure to language through living or visiting the countries that you want speak their language. For instance, one of friends had the chance to get a six month visit to England and we were astonished of his level of English when he came back. He English became more fluent as if he is a native speaker. I was amazed with that change in his level in such relatively short period.
To sum up, I believe that travelling abroad has more benefits than travelling inside your own country. You will communicate and learn about unique culture and traditions, besides, you could learn new languages or improve your fluency in these languages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, i think, in fact, kind of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8102189781 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57888031213 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532846715328 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2398010845 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.85 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342014151306 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105331835504 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134616121932 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253489848622 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137302643807 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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