TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

I'm agree with this idea that for be a responsible adult about financial issue people should learn to manage financial matters when they are children. In the today world the most important issue for each person is financial which play a vital role in their life and successful. On the other hand life has been hard and having income isn't so easy. So applying complex strategy in this field can be a good way for successful in financial matter.
First, so many useful characteristic earn when people are child. In my point of view if people learn how to manage their financial matters they will be a successful person in their adulthood. For an example my parent didn't teach me to control my finance when i interned university i had serous problems in my money management because i had been accustomed to spend money without any strategy.
Second, financial has different issues such as how shopping, saving money, buying food, finding stores with high discount and so on. Learning all these complex issues and be used to them need a long period of time. Children by making mistakes and doing trial and error can learn all.
Finally, children by being financial responsibility have been more serous in money management. Some addiction in childhood will be conserve until adulthood money managing is one of these cases.
For an example one of my friends didn't accustomed to money managing and she couldn't manage her money saving and spending so she had serous problems. She couldn't pay her fee and at the end of each term she borrow money of others.
As a conclusion, learning money managing from childhood is the most important issue for each person which help be a responsible and successful about financial matters in their future life.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 280.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90714285714 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62635776353 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.280648111 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1428571429 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217225133066 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837035656962 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494444977056 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118957867229 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132551626522 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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