It is so important to instill certain values in our children since young age. I agree with the statement that children should learn to manage their own money at young age in order to become financially responsible adults. I will explain the reasons for my stance in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it so important for any person to know how to manage his or her income effectively. It is one of the main factors that could guarantee a stable and successful life. If someone just keep spending his or her money without any plan, they will likely face terrible consequences in the future. A penny saved is a penny gained, that saying is correct in the course of the many needs of people in the recent times. I do believe that what makes someone is more liable to success is how they spend their money. The life experience around confirms the fact that the children who were raised to be more discreet when dealing with resources have better chances of building a balanced life. where he or she can fulfill the needs of his family.
Furthermore, it is essential to educate our kids how to be responsible. One effective way of achieving this is by making them know the value and the importance of money and how to spend it. We may spoil our children by offering them money whenever they asked for it without guiding and advising them. Therefore, it goes without saying that developing our children's personalities require help them to practice how to manage their money. Many studies indicate that those young people who have learned the importance of managing your available money or resources are more liable to success and building a productive lifestyle.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that children that learned how to manage their money at young age are likely to be more successful individuals in their life. That is because they will learn how to supply the needs of their families in more effective way, and they will be more reliable responsible individuals.
I couldn´t agree more. They
I couldn´t agree more. They should work as soon as possible - to same extend, of course, but for sake of realising the value of money vs value of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76811594203 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59564205891 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498550724638 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4416152817 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7647058824 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2941176471 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246164630243 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869474378639 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138761852111 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195211727608 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151031321725 0.0645574589148 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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