TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

A glance at how adults raise and educate their children brings to light a question that has several times provoked discussion, that is, whether children should be taught to manage their money at an early age, in order for them to be capable in doing so when they grow up. As far as I as concerned, it is necessary for kids to get this training when they are young.

First and foremost, it is widely accepted that many good habits are easier to be cultivated at young age, and financial management is no exception. Just like grown-ups, at present children also tend to be affected by materialism. For instance, they may be attracted by a variety of toys and really wants to own them. Offering them a certain amount of money will help them make decisions reasonably and wisely, instead of unconditionally asking their parents to buy all the toys they like. As long as this habit is formed, they will definitely be more rational in spending money when they grow up.

Secondly, youngsters are more impressionable to the guidelines from their parents than when they become adults. Sometimes the ability to be financially responsible can not be learned by people themselves with ease, underlining the significance of advice from parents. Nonetheless, if one is already an economically independent adult, he or she may prefer to spend money following his or her own willings and is not likely to follow the valuable suggestions provided by their parents. On the other hand, the roles as parents can be better fulfilled when the children are relatively young. During this period, the experience from adults are better conveyed to the next generation.

Last but not least, an additional argument comes to mind is that children can enjoy the opportunity to come up with novel financial techniques, since they only take a relatively small amount of money from parents and do not face the risk of bankruptcy. In fact, many renowned businessmen, including Rockefeller, showed their talents in finance at an early age. If they were not given the chance to deal with their own money when they were young, may be they would not be able to build their business empires later.

Due to the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe it is wise to let kids manage their own money when they are young, and picking up better habits and receiving the guide from parents are two prime and conspicuous reasons.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 447, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87009803922 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73024584217 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546568627451 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.2605994307 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1875 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230338367567 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776024737059 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483720455694 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140196264595 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350600162144 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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