Today, a prevalent statement we hear a lot is that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are because the producers are sparing no effort or attract more consumers and sell their products. A considerable number of opponents, however, argue that a lot of advertisements just show how good the products as they actually are, since deception would be punished by government and abandoned by consumers. As far as I am concerned, the latter view seems align more with my perspective. There are several reasons to support my point of view, however, the following two would suffice here.
To begin with, we do sometimes feel that we do not have the same user experience as those in the advertisements, however, it dose not equal to saying that the advantages of the products are exaggerated. This is because most of the time we neglect the suitable using environment of the products when we evaluate their qualities. For instance, a car advertisement may show us a picture that a family with big smiles on their faces are driving their car along the blue ocean with warm breeze caressing their cheeks. It is not fair for us to say that this car dose not reach our expectation when we are driving in a crowed and anxious city and stuck in a traffic jam. Another simple example is that a health remedy may claims that it can help to improve our sleep quality. However, if the user do not follow the instruction and eat spicy food or drink coffee at night, then there is no doubt that the health remedy does not meet our expectation.
Another reason I would like to point out is that making product seem much better than they really are does not benefit the producers in the long run, so there is no need for a wise producer to do so. Exaggerating the benefit of the product would higher the expectation of the buyers and make them more easily to feel disappointed. What's more, they may even feel cheated, too. For example, a toothpaste claims that it could whiten our teeth in a week. It is not difficult for us to image how disappointed people would feel if they buy the toothpaste in the hope that they could possess shiny teeth but it turns out that nothing happens. Disappointment, anger and a feeling of being deceived of consumers will ruins the reputation of the toothpaste. This is a risk that a wise producer would not take in advertisement.
As we have mentioned above, only when we taking the using environment and using method into account can we fairly evaluate the quality of a product. What's more, for a long time profits, we do not see any motivation for producers to exaggerate their products, too. For these reason, I disagree with the statement propose above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, really, so, then, for example, for instance, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66947368421 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70394315533 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498947368421 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.93288203 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.9 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225208052144 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644942680401 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598417104058 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136408302988 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607743525004 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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