TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Human influence on each other by the different way, Some alteration can have the positive impact on our thought. many people think their teachers can have more influence than their friends. However, I believe that friends have strong influential effect because of the two reasons.

First, friendship is the best way to continue our life which can be difficult in situation that we are far from our parents. As for me, I lived in a dormitory with my best friend when I had to decide about choosing my major. My friend gives me a valuable piece of advice which give me an idea to increase my science knoweldge. So, I decided to enroll for an additional class which helps me to improve my weaknesses in basic science such as math, biology, and economy. Then, I took the university entrance exam and I got the permission for attending the university.

Second, students spend their time with their friends who trust them. Also, they follow each other in various ways, for instance, attending the library, sharing their idea about the university subjects. When I was in college, one of my close friends encourages me to go to the library for studying during the exam period in the first semester. Although I was not ready for study in public area where I thought there will be noise and I could not concentrate on my lesson. So, I attended to the library with her and I studied for six hours. Also, we dissolve our problems by sharing our knowledge from what we remembered from the lecture. Therefore, I passed the exam with a high score due to her encouragement for studying in other place than home.

In conclusion, the student gets their attitude from their friend who they spend most of their time with. I think friend have the direct effect in our life due to our relationship.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, as for, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68789808917 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54855083597 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550955414013 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.1235585916 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.5882352941 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133358114253 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052523730351 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866487671052 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101775731895 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058859299103 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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