TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are many ways to achieve success and people try various methods as per their choice and feasibility. Many people think that it is important to continue doing the same thing or to be persistent in order to gain success. They also do this because they want to avoid risks involved in doing something different. However, I don’t concur with this notion and believes that to attain goals in life, it is needed to try something new and take risks for the following reasons.

To begin with, it is mandatory to do something in which one is interested and good at. When people are young they generally are not aware as to what will be appropriate for them in future. It happens mainly due to deficient knowledge and sometimes because of lack of guidance for example when I was in my high school, no one told me what should I take as my main subject and so looking at my friends I ended up taking Math as my main subject. But later I realized that it was a big mistake as I was not capable of comprehending the formulas. Soon, I changed my subject to “Science” and then later I went to Med School. Today, I am a successful Doctor in my city. Thus, this incident taught me the significance of choosing a Right career of one’s interest.

Also, a person should be able to mould oneself according to the demand of the society. To elaborate this, I would like to give an example, in olden days tape recorders and cassette players were in trend and so many people used to have the business of it but as time progressed and with the advent of technology such as CD players and computer. The inclination of people towards cassette players decreased. Thus, people had to change their businesses and start a new one. Therefore, sometimes It is not the choice but the requirement that ask a person to do something new and quit the old one to achieve success in future as well.

To recapitulate, I would like to mention that although people think that taking risks is dangerous and may cause loses in life but it is wiser to change according to the need and circumstances as I have proved by giving example above. There are many people who have achieved great heights by doing different things and it is a harsh fact in life that the ‘Life is unpredictable” and whether a person is willing or not, she/he will have to take risks at some point in life. Hence, it is better to develop an habit of taking risks willingly and to face the difficulties in life boldly, this will build one’s confidence as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48917748918 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57382152857 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2762115659 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.157894737 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3157894737 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219146789942 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684762611769 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563284259919 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143503621077 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729584725868 0.0645574589148 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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