TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In general, many people think successful people to do any work that they know how to do it well. This is my deep belief that successful people try new things and encounter with any situation. I have much reason from my mind which I will narrate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, trying new things causes crack new concerns. In the globalized world, anything is changed. All situations are not stable and every time we face the new problem that needs to new strategies like air pollution, new diseases, financial problems, ... . These huge problems need to men try the new thing to get prosperity and can solve them. Old fashioned cannot responder new concern. successful people like as scientists and engineers and entrepreneurs try to take a new risk and doing hazard methods to present new strategies to upgrade life level and make more satisfaction in the humankind. For instance, scientists work on new diseases like AIDS, they encounter with danger situation to make the vaccine for help to the patients.
Another reason to substantiate my standpoint is trying new things help to more learn and expand spectrum understanding. Nowadays technologies progress every time. Successful people try to be up to date and innovate things. During the time, investors which people that express new strategies that may ordinary people laugh them. They never gave up and kept on new ideas as far as invented new things. We can point Thomas Edison. He faced with failure during his life, but he did not disappointed and tried a new way and then succeed.
And last reason, it is axiomatic new thing could help men to save time and can compete with other companies that use the old thing. Many things come to market can help people to do faster and have better efficiency. For instance, in past years, business mans used the abacus to calculate. This is a long process and has not high accuracy. After a few years, the calculator is invented. But still, there are some old people use the abacus and cannot leave their habit and test new things. They waste time and cannot adapt with the new instrument.
To sum up, I believe that for reaching to achievement it is necessary people challenge with new obstacles and try to take a risk because this makes them innovative. The world need to people have guts to take the risk.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 260, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...n, new diseases, financial problems, ... . These huge problems need to men try the...
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Line 2, column 395, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Successful
...fashioned cannot responder new concern. successful people like as scientists and engineers...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'disappoint'
Suggestion: disappoint
...failure during his life, but he did not disappointed and tried a new way and then succeed. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, then, well, for instance, in general, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79052369077 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5730921154 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536159600998 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2843905067 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.8846153846 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4230769231 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57692307692 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292056182155 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805335242497 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700044151625 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184997849806 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607734763578 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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