TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As a matter of fact, doing some routines is the simplest way to live; such as being a simple employee or be a mediocre parent. On the other hand, there are too many risks and opportunities for people, who wants to take it. Some people prefer to go out of the safety borders and do something new to find something or be creative. Undoubtedly, being inside safety borders is safe and calm. In contrast, going out of those things is scary and risky, but some people do it, because they want to create and they want to be unique and successful. I personally believe that, being successful has a direct relationship with taking risk.
First and foremost, some people want to create something new. They are not tired of trying new things such as new introduced technologies. They use new technologies to create something better. It not depends on their age or their sex. It just depends on their personality. For instance, my mother has a big sense of creativity. She loves to do something new and she is always making new things. When she was younger, she changed our vacuum to a robot. She is 65 years old now and she is still creative even in her food's recipes.
Second, successful people tempt to find an easier way for doing things. They do not want to follow some rules in an official condition. Those group of people will do their best to do something to make things faster. Some random people think they are lazy, but they are not. Additionally, companies want to hire those creative people, because they can merge some overlap tasks and find new ways to do them quickly. For example, my husband is working for Walmart headquarter and he is super smart. He found a way to increase efficiency without increasing in the number of employees. He got raise, because of his new methods.
Last but not least, these risk friendly people can learn a lot. They try many new ways to improve something. As a matter of fact, many of those ways are not successful, so they will learn something. After a while, they would be knowledgeable. This characteristic will help them to be more successful in their life. Every day has a lesson for them.
To sum up, although trying new things and new ways is risky, it can help people to increase their abilities in varieties of aspects.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, as a matter of fact, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61927710843 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57717574277 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501204819277 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0634777614 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.8387096774 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3870967742 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.51612903226 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268349102223 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729872265922 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708705990786 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161919919794 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075662973103 0.0645574589148 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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