TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

It is important for any successful manager to built a net work of relation. Some people may argue that the ability to relate well relation to people is more important than studying hard in school, however, I do not agree with argument for the following reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, knowledge and skills are essential for any business. You can gain them at university better than any place else, because it is the place where you find the most qualified professional who built your hard and soft skills. Hence, any kind of relation if not accompanied with a solid ground of knowledge and skills will be useless and unhelpful. It is not a coincidence that the most most prominent managers and business men or women in the world are graduate form high prestigious universities. For example, A. Zweel the winner of Noble prize in physics is a graduate of one of the most known university in the United States.

Second, what is more important of having many relations is how to manage these relations in the most efficient way. How would you learn a thing like that?. The answer is definitely at a university. The science of management and administration is a huge topic that contains many branches with many specializations. It teaches you the most effective techniques and methods to manage your business and costumers relationships. You can not get such sophisticated training outside an educational institution. For instance, in my country, Egypt, the highest posts in any company often go to those who studied management or administration in high-rank university. Hence, learning how to manage your relation comes first in priority before having these relations.

Admittedly, some could consciously argue that having relation is more practical and important than studying in college, However, I strongly believe that building a network of relations without mastering the methods of managing them is just like having a fast car moving without a driver, which could lead to severe consequences.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that studying is far vital than the ability to relate to people when it comes to a future, because in the university you learn how to build and manage your relations in the most effective way.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: most
...lpful. It is not a coincidence that the most most prominent managers and business men or ...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'most' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: most
...lpful. It is not a coincidence that the most most prominent managers and business men or ...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elations in the most effective way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03968253968 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91181404141 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.4304724421 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.833333333 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263016449776 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782163339112 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900391369863 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170877006649 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118315557373 0.0645574589148 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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