TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

As soon as students enter to college, they try to persuade and adopt the strategies and values that help them to be successful in their future careers. Contemplating about different effective strategies, raises the question that whether students should concentrate on their studying or to build their communicational skills. Although, some people may hold the opposite view, I contend that acquiring knowledge is the key for success. Some persuasive reasons are as follows.

To begin with, from my stand point, an important factor on getting a job after school that determines the merits of a students is their GPA. As a matter of fact, pupils, usually does not have many work experience to show off their abilities through that. However, the knowledge and the success that they have achieved in the classes that they have taken sets to play an important role in them getting the job. for instance, an interviewer does not expect that a recently graduated person has many job experience. On the other hand, he will look for his achievements in school and test him on his knowledge about related classes that he has taken. Therefore, it is important for students to maintain a good GPA.

Another significant aspect which should be taken into consideration is that in the workplaces people are trusted, whom have a more knowledge. To put it another way, the manager in a company will assign a worthy task to someone that is more knowledgeable, as opposed to his peer with good communicational skills. I agree that in some jobs the ability to relate with people can sometimes be very helpful. Still, knowledge sets to play a pivotal role in being trusted and having the opportunity of doing the more important tasks.

As a final point, I want to mention that, schools are a great source for students to gain knowledge. Having this in mind, they should try to take advantage of this opportunity to get the most out of it. Colleges are built with the intention of providing knowledge and conveying them in the best way. Consequently, students should use their time in college to gain that knowledge. Other abilities as communicational ones can get adopted throughout the rest of life and by experience.

To sum up, for the aforementioned ground, I think the most important strategy for students is to put the knowledge and focusing on achieving it first. Communicational skills can be learnt through other steps of life too. Moreover, your knowledge can get you hired to you dream job and, with it, you will be a more reliable person in the workplace.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...er school that determines the merits of a students is their GPA. As a matter of fact, pupi...
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Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much work experience', 'a good deal of work experience'.
Suggestion: much work experience; a good deal of work experience
... of fact, pupils, usually does not have many work experience to show off their abilities through tha...
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Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...important role in them getting the job. for instance, an interviewer does not expec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, for instance, i think, as a matter of fact, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91454965358 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84715078064 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501154734411 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1808812734 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7272727273 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6818181818 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214820677975 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615738647581 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043340786028 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11687446894 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405083046931 0.0645574589148 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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