TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

While most of the youngs in American took part time jobs, seldomly do their peers in China do. Personally, I think that takeing part time job could help adultlescents to prepare for their adult life, and Chinese parents should learn from their American counterparts. To illustrate my opinion, I am going to give the pros and cons below.

One important thing children could learn from part-time job is the idea of working. Most students in China have no idea what are they going to study or what are they going to when they become adult. In this case, let their feet wet in certain region is the best way for them to find their interests, and prepare for their future life. For example, the majority of college students in China complain that they do not like their major. However, lot of them find what they really interested after working. If students could do part-time job before then enter the college, they may not come across these problems.

Besides working experience, students could also get wages from their part-time job. Children may not become financially independence from these money. However, compared to their not working peers, they can still have more freedom to buy merchandise they want. Moreover, students could also deposit those money into their college tuition fund. In China, 90% undergraduates get sponsorship either from their parents or from school. Only less than 1% students pay tuition from their own wages.

Last but not the least, students could learn scocial skills when doing part-time job. Students learn to deal with social crises, which is crucial for their adult life, when doing part-time job. Ironicly, in China, employers morked newly graduates about their poor scocial skills. Suppose those saphomore could

In a word, parents should allow their children to do some part time job. In this case, their offsprings could be better prepared for their adult life.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ile most of the youngs in American took part time jobs, seldomly do their peers in China ...
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Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...na do. Personally, I think that takeing part time job could help adultlescents to prepare...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
Suggestion: this money; these moneys; these monies
...ot become financially independence from these money. However, compared to their not working...
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Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
.... Moreover, students could also deposit those money into their college tuition fund. In Chi...
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Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...al skills. Suppose those saphomore could In a word, parents should allow their ch...
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Line 9, column 59, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... should allow their children to do some part time job. In this case, their offsprings cou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, while, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04100946372 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32186942578 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539432176656 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3185208889 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.9 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.85 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284441115371 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100008813143 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769229913596 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196441095733 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581692078572 0.0645574589148 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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