There is a controversial debate on whether the children should take a job to become prepared for adult life or not. Some hold the view that it will prevent them from their main goal such as educational prosperity, while others dispute their idea by some reasons. I tend to support the later view and the bases for my view are personal, social and financial.
Personally, it is essential to know that success does not define only in educational purposes. Although the children have to focus on their study, by taking a part-time job they can achieve abundant valuable skills and experiences. For example, in mechanical engineering most the student start to work soon after entering the university. Not only do they become acquainted with their course practically, but also they get ready for their future job. However some define success as an external concept to be measured by high educational degrees, part-time working gives you the expertise that you will not gain otherwise.
Socially-speaking, we live in an interdependent world which imposes its obligations on us. Soon or late, children are to prepare for starting adult life in which they are in contact with others. They should learn group-working, speaking in public, demanding their rights and most importantly, responsibility. Otherwise, they cannot be successful in the future. Take my brother for instance who commenced to work from 20. He debt his job success to knowledge gained from working coupled with studying which would not have been possible otherwise. Albeit my mother disagreed those days, my father encouraged him to work.
From a financial angle, there is no doubt that financial independence plays an integral role in preparing individuals for future life. By the mean of part-time working, youngsters become partially independent and also learn how to manage their budget. In spite of the fact that parents will continue to support them financially, they can constrain the pocket money in order to teach them how to manage their financial problems either for themselves or for their family. Moreover, in this way children perceive that they have to make a lot of endeavors to get their goals. For instance, I was a kind of lavish child before starting to work but after a short while working, I realized that how difficult the money will be saved. So I ceased to spend a lot and started to save my salary.
In a nutshell, aside from working experiences, part-time working gives children the opportunity to enhance their social skills and also to solve their financial problems personally. Hence, I am convinced that part-time working has more merits than demerits and it worth doing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...so they get ready for their future job. However some define success as an external conc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, kind of, no doubt, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10478359909 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83344013511 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542141230068 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5634973348 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4347826087 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252052231429 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708114423161 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057359205236 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142098002733 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027190654253 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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