It is no doubt that nowadays people have aware of the importance of communities which are crucial for the society. However, most people argue that people are too busy to help communities. I totally agree with the point, especially when the heavy burden of study and the Internet are concerned.
To begin with, young people have to pay attention on study and they cannot spare much time on communities. Because in the modern world, it is impossible to own a good job without at least a bachelor’s degree, thus they are forced to study all the time. Unlike young people now, people in the past have much available opportunities to serve their communities. For example, when Jobs dropped out of university forty years ago, he had enough time to do what he wanted so it is no wonder he could spare time to help communities. But for young students now, on the contrary, they concentrate all the time on study or there is no job for them.
Moreover, the Internet has taken up most of young people’s free time. Due to the highly developed technology, people can use various ways to waste their time such as smart phones, computers and laptops which are convenient to communicate with friends, look for news and play games wherever they want. Comparing with helping communities, they do not need to pay attention and waste lots of time. And according to a research by the Peking University, students waste most of their free time on smart phones unlike thirty years ago when young often did communities together. So there is no wonder that young do not have time to do communities.
Admittedly, some young indeed help their communities according to regulations of some schools. These schools have aware of this situation and they force students to engage in community service during vacations. However, if students are required to finish what they do not like, most will choose to pay no attention on communities not alone in fact the time is limit.
For the aforementioned ground, although some students are committed to community service due to the policy of the school, I firmly believe it is impossible for young to spare time on communities until their time is not fulfilled with study or the Internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the young') or simply say ''most young''.
Suggestion: most of the young; most young
... Moreover, the Internet has taken up most of young people's free time. Due to the hig...
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Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...nd waste lots of time. And according to a research by the Peking University, students wast...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, moreover, so, thus, at least, for example, in fact, no doubt, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86807387863 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72475191788 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477572559367 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8850872962 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.529411765 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233806949227 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094939612855 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593258191174 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139449787576 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533937346061 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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