TPO 25 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Without a shadow of the doubt having a good community plays a vital role in social development and improvement. We live in our community and it effects on us in various aspects. Many people contend that young peole do not have enough time to help their communities, while others assert it is not true. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be some what convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that young people can be very influential in their communities. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and probably the most reason is that we send our kids to schools to prepare them for living in a community. In schools they can learn different things and they can enhance their skills and abilities to do different tasks. After they get elder, we can give them responsibilities to do like cleaning dishes at home, buying vegetables or other things. Taking this kind of responsibilities are the firs steps in entering to the real world. Consequently, they can get part time jobs and by having a job they can do their actions in community. As a result, young people can improve the condition of their nation.
Another point springing to mind is that entering universities is a so much promising step into a world of opportunities. As an individual, we can have a chance to be an expert in our fileds. If we do our tasks in university, we will be a successful person and our succedb by defult can lead to a big impression in our community. For example, my father is a scientist in chemistry field. Two years ago he decided to built an institute for all the scientists in my country, where they can do their experiments. Recently, they discoverd a new material that can be very useful in fabricating advanced devices. As you can see, people and especially young people can do useful actions toward their communities' enhancement.
Although the mentioned reasons are the first ones cross to the mind as reasons young people can be effective in society. There is a posibility that they do not do actions for improving their country. So, in this way they have bad impression on society. However, I affirm that young people are effective in creating a good situation in country and by managing the situation and breeding good kids the disadvantages can be neglected.
To sum it all up, it is easy see that young people are effective in society. They can be responsible and do their tasks during their childood and after entering universities they can be an expert in their field of specialty. I hope someday we all breed good kids to have a better society. The more our kids improve, the greater our society will enhance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 347, Rule ID: SOME_WHAT_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhat' (=slightly)?
Suggestion: somewhat
... of the opposing arguments appear to be some what convincing and stand to point. However,...
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Line 2, column 473, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... real world. Consequently, they can get part time jobs and by having a job they can do th...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, while, for example, kind of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69791666667 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82703881075 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477083333333 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8526701015 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5185185185 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185218987034 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580775493097 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648883992045 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12455446219 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287033359008 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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