TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays a vast part of population tends to claim that a young generation does not give an adequate volume of time to helping their communities. Although some people may not agree with the stance, I am prone to buttress it because of the reasons which will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, today's social life has moved from backyards and streets of local communities in the internet and social networks. The web has saturated all levels of our existence and a majority of contemporaries start their day by looking at their Facebook pages, Twitter accounts and checking their e-mails. The online social life has become even more important that offline interaction. In fact, many urban dwellers who live in blocks of flats do not know their neighbors' at all. They feed detached from communities in which they live. By contrast, our predecessors who did not have social networks paid a lot of attention to interaction with neighbors. This change has led to the fact that young people tend to neglect by their duties to communities and do not devote even a miniscule amount of time to helping their neighbors.
Secondly, today's young adults and youngsters are too busy and simply cannot devote enough time to their communities. An average student, for instance, has to study a bunch of difficult subjects; and a pile of information which they ought to read and understand for becoming professionals keeps growing. A young person who works in a business or government structure has to work up to 12 hours per day in a hope to be promoted or to get a pay raise; needless to say that they keep studying and working at home as well. By contrast, in the past when our parents were young adults, our fathers who worked in mills, automaker plants had a steady eight-hours work day with an appreciable salary; they rights were properly protected and supervised by government structures. Additionally to it, the size of the wages allowed our young mothers did not work and devote their time to helping communities.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow a person to state that contemporary young people give sufficient time to their communities. Chiefly, the person may aver that today some programs exist which are aimed at helping local communities and some students volunteer their time to it; we read about them in newspapers and blogs. However, I still affirm my prospect because those youngsters do not represent the entire society; they are only a small percentage of young people. We tend to see them as a significant movement inasmuch as they are promoted by mass media and social networks but it is only illusion which does not reflect reality. By contrast, in the past helping others was a huge trend and almost all people participated to it.
To wrap up, nowadays young people do not give enough time to helping local communities because they are too busy and their social life has migrated from their communities to the internet services.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
they rights were properly protected
their rights were properly protected
the size of the wages allowed our young mothers did not work and devote their time to helping communities.
the size of the wages allowed our young mothers not to work and devote their time to helping communities.
but it is only illusion
but it is only an illusion
Sentence: This change has led to the fact that young people tend to neglect by their duties to communities and do not devote even a miniscule amount of time to helping their neighbors.
Error: miniscule Suggestion: minuscule
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 503 350
No. of Characters: 2413 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.736 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.668 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 697, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'right'
Suggestion: right
...rk day with an appreciable salary; they rights were properly protected and supervised ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 769, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...nd supervised by government structures. Additionally to it, the size of the wages allowed ou...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, as to, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91252485089 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71156783156 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499005964215 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1822000335 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.55 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.15 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212668885795 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733245332452 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704502682053 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149255447744 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048947495297 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.