It is undeniable that choosing a suitable job is crucial and also a big trouble for children. Though some think it is a good idea to follow their parents’ profession, however in my point of view, it depends on children’s interests and the need of society on what job they will choose.
To begin with, no one can insist on a job which takes oneself more than ten years or even a whole life’s time without interests. If you do not love your job, even when you have a high salary, it is sure that you cannot do it well thus you have to give up after many times of failure. Take my brother Li as an example. After he graduated, he became an employee who worked in a large company where our father also worked in. Though the payment is good, he always felt bored because he could not show off his talents in such a huge company wherein everything is unchangeable. Finally, he had to quit this job and built his own company to achieve his dream. So choosing jobs that are similar to parents’ jobs is quite unwise as wasting one’s talent without considering one’s interests.
Moreover, some parents’ jobs are not necessary in the modern society. With the high improvement of science and technology, various jobs are taken by robots or other new jobs. For instance, many car factories need lots of workers to assemble cars many years ago. However, what they need now are just some robots which never feel tired or hungry. What is more, without payment for robots, the owners of many factories do not need workers any more. According to a research by the Peking University, more than one hundred jobs will disappear in the following thirty years. So if you still insist on your parent’s jobs, soon you will find there is no need for your job.
Admittedly, following your parents’ jobs gives you more opportunities, for you to learn a lot of experience from them. So you can adapt to the job more quickly than normal fresher. But without any interests, any difficulty that you face can cause you to give up with a large possibility. And not to say when your parents’ job is discarded by the society, how can you preset it forever?
For the aforementioned grounds, I firmly believe it is unwise for a young adult to choose a job similar to his parents’, especially when considering he has no interests or the job is outdated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, for instance, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68973747017 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78065390841 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529832935561 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9169773325 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5714285714 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424607721098 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137901285404 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106516009986 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274451791941 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347183472928 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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