TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

As a matter of fact, people have different ideas about job opportunities. Some people prefer to have a secure job and some people prefer to have a fantastic job what is the best match for them. I personally believe, most of people tend to take a secure job opportunities, because of high expenses, less stress etc.
First of all, most of people have a family and they have to pay all bills and expenses. These usual people tend to take a secure positions in a company instead of a pleasant job. They need to be sure about covering their expenses. They want to have a strong ability to pay instead of satisfaction.
Second of all, having a job for sure is pleasant. People can be calm by having a job for a long time. They will not have any stress for losing the job. Some employees prefer to be calm instead of being satisfied. For instance, one of my friends in the UCLA university in San Diego, has looked for a position in California's companies after her graduation. She found two job opportunities. One of them was in a public school and one of them was in a small modern company. The first job has asked her to sign a contract for three years, but the second one was depend on her ability. She decided to choose the first one, because of those contract things.
Last but not least, in the most cultures and countries it is a fact that a job is not a sweet thing in human's life. People in these kinds of countries think, job is an unpleasant thing that everybody have to do that for survive. Nobody cares about the quality of a position or atmosphere in a company in these cultures. They think, they have to do something hard and harsh and there is no way to avoid it. People in these regions have no idea about enjoying of doing something. They will not be super successful in their life by these kinds of attitudes.
To sum up, most people prefer to take some secure jobs instead of a fun jobs.They don't care about satisfaction. These kind of attitudes have some bad effects on their life and they cannot be that much successful.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 217, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...t match for them. I personally believe, most of people tend to take a secure job opportunities...
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Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...penses, less stress etc. First of all, most of people have a family and they have to pay all ...
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Line 2, column 130, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'position'?
Suggestion: position
...hese usual people tend to take a secure positions in a company instead of a pleasant job....
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Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...for three years, but the second one was depend on her ability. She decided to choose t...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
... some secure jobs instead of a fun jobs.They dont care about satisfaction. These kin...
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Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... secure jobs instead of a fun jobs.They dont care about satisfaction. These kind of ...
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Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...jobs.They dont care about satisfaction. These kind of attitudes have some bad effects on t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'so', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'as a matter of fact', 'first of all', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239808153477 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.151079136691 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.083932853717 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0287769784173 0.046263068375 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0551558752998 0.0685040099705 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134292565947 0.118717715034 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0263788968825 0.0351676179071 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50325506855 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0383693045564 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00239808153477 0.00188951952338 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.119904076739 0.0887237588012 135% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00959232613909 0.0209618222197 46% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00239808153477 0.0139019557991 17% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2036.0 2387.08602151 85% => OK
No of words: 378.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38624338624 5.86048508987 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.269841269841 0.338922669872 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.15873015873 0.251872472559 63% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.119047619048 0.174417080927 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0873015873016 0.112833075102 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50325506855 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457671957672 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.9713364507 59.2087087015 81% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 15.75 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.3825775915 48.84282405 56% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8333333333 120.699889404 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.458333333333 0.644075263715 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 31.623015873 45.7405998639 69% => OK
Elegance: 1.70408163265 1.45489161554 117% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259543099194 0.300154397459 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104274457871 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0877294348814 0.0752933317313 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488272923832 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137077643849 0.151897553556 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102521260015 0.114077575197 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521516136859 0.0781384742642 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.322976096656 0.336927656856 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0587480553113 0.067059652881 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18005746004 0.210909579961 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321116806298 0.0618886996521 52% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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