TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Undoubtedly, having a secure job is extremely essential for everybody
while, from my point on view, I think that getting a job which satisfy
employee will have enduring impact on employee during time because of
promoting quickly, blooming in the future and gaining more money from which, different aspects of issue are scrutinized as follow.
Firstly, promoting at job is regarded as the key element in terms of getting satisfying job. Someone who has satisfying job can progress in his job and can become expert in short time. Take a employee as an example.He do not like his job. He can not do his duty as well as others and sometimes try to do his work without any loving. Thus, promoting in job can be occurred by satisfying in job.
Moreover, blooming in the future is an another branch of matter. According to the psychologist, having satisfying job has a lot of various impact on employees. This item can cultivate other abilities in individual. For instance, a person that has a secure job may try less than who has a satisfying job due to being in secure broad. In security the goodness of every thing might be highlighted. Therefore, when a person get a satisfying job, he will be forced to try for developing his job or his skills that can cause to bloom gradually in the future.

finally, that last not the least is that gaining much money during time by getting satisfying job. The term of salary or earning money is so crucial for anybody. Whit having satisfied job, the self confidence can progress and can lead to emerge sequence of success for person such as Antony Robins, Bill Gaits. in result, in my estimation, the chance of being successful is high in satisfying job.

by and large, due to aforementioned reasons, it seems that secure job may has some benefits at the first glance however a satisfying job gives persons much advantages because of progressing in job, blooming in the future and gaining much money

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...job is extremely essential for everybody while, from my point on view, I think th...
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...mpact on employee during time because of promoting quickly, blooming in the futur...
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Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...ferent aspects of issue are scrutinized as follow. Firstly, promoting at job is regarded...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d can become expert in short time. Take a employee as an example.He do not like h...
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Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: He
...ort time. Take a employee as an example.He do not like his job. He can not do his ...
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Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... time. Take a employee as an example.He do not like his job. He can not do his dut...
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Line 6, column 37, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a branch' or 'another branch'.
Suggestion: a branch; another branch
...b. Moreover, blooming in the future is an another branch of matter. According to the psychologi...
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Line 6, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ng in the future is an another branch of matter. According to the psychologist, h...
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Line 6, column 520, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'blooming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: blooming
...ng his job or his skills that can cause to bloom gradually in the future. finally, t...
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Suggestion: Finally
...e to bloom gradually in the future. finally, that last not the least is that gainin...
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Suggestion: In
...rson such as Antony Robins, Bill Gaits. in result, in my estimation, the chance of...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: By
...ccessful is high in satisfying job. by and large, due to aforementioned reason...
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Line 10, column 152, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... however a satisfying job gives persons much advantages because of progressing in jo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, i think, in short, such as, as well as, by and large

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77218934911 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68744765844 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505917159763 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.5594674528 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8823529412 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229754916978 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920036397526 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534672774467 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115319930538 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572804126151 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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