TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

No one can deny the fact that there are few things more important than choosing a career, for it will shape one's life for at least several years or even longer and will also in part determine one's economic condition and social status. Some might contend that since having a stable job is so important for make a living by oneself that it is better to take a secure job as soon as possible, instead of waiting for more satisfying ones. However, I would like to suggest that the criteria for choosing a job should not be security and stability, and it is people's own interests and education background that brings about a strong motivation and the possibility of motivation success.

First and foremost, people spend a great proportion of their life on working, and it would be disastrous if they are not doing what they like. For example, if one wants to become a teacher simply because its stable and well-paid, it is highly likely that he or she will constantly be annoyed by the naughty kids and get fatigue after a day's work, and soon loses the slightest enthusiasm he or she originally had. On the other hand, if one is determined to devote his or her life to educating the next generation, not only will one be more willing to make a great effort, but also feels more content.

Secondly, in a world that is more and more specific in labour division, it is desired that people choose a career close to the field they are trained during the course of education. Equipped with essential knowledge required in that particular field, they can perform better and more professional in general, as well as be more likely to innovate, to come up with new ideas and inventions, which is a main theme in modern society. This is well illustrated in fields like Information Technology, advanced industry and scientific research. People working closely to their studies also have a higher chance to success.

Last but not least, some might say that choosing a job only according to one's enthusiasm and education background is risk-taking. However, as the world is swiftly developing on a daily basis, the job market is also changing quickly, having higher and higher expectations for employers, and a number of people lose their jobs on a daily basis. Thus, take a secure job is not an once-and-for-all solution and people have to work hard regardless what kind of job they are doing. Thus, it is totally unwise to contemplate one job as stable and secure and believe one can take that job for their whole career.

Due to the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe one should not take a secure job as long as he or she has the opportunity, rather than seeking for a more satisfying one.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...an choosing a career, for it will shape ones life for at least several years or even...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...eer close to the field they are trained during the course of education. Equipped with essential know...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...y that choosing a job only according to ones enthusiasm and education background is ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...y basis. Thus, take a secure job is not an once-and-for-all solution and people ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, at least, for example, in general, kind of, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2219.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70127118644 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66123200982 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4997497492 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.933333333 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4666666667 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284954971327 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105449910068 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635211569974 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167675335215 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456359140565 0.0645574589148 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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