TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays as all of us know education is one of the most important issues which most of families are involved with that. It often determines our level of success so, paying attention to education is necessary. The question is that parent today are more busy in their children's education than before? Different people may have different views about this but in my point of view, they spend most of their time and energy to improve children's studies. I have lots of good reasons for my opinion but the most important of them are: parents are more concern about teenager's future and new technology.
First and foremost, today parents are more concern about children's future. They know better than their children that time has changed and obtaining good position needs to good background in the school and university. So they try to stimulate their children to concentrate to their education instead of wasting time with playing or others. For example on of my friends who have finished his studies was searching for a good job but he wasn't prosperous to find suitable career. All the factories requested high scores and documents that prove he has passed practical courses. Due to lack of good background education till now he couldn't find any job. This example shows that parents' concern isn't meaningless.
On the other hand, nowadays technology has impressive effects on people, particularly on teenagers. Parents know that their children have more deal with computers and cell phones rather than studying and they know that we couldn't avoid its influences. So they try to make a plan for their children to separate some times to study and sometimes for checking the net. If they don't manage children, they will waste all of their times with new developed tools.
As a conclusion, although some people think that young people should learn being independent, I believe that it's not good idea. Not only they should manage them to reach good job also, children maybe waste their valuable times with internet. Don't you think time has changed and behaviors should change?

Nowadays science has impressive effects on humans’ lives and paying attention to that is very essential. Science and education are directly related to each other and often they determine our level of success. The question is that should universities pay more money for their stuff? Different people have different ideas about this point but in my point of view, supporting university professors could be secret of prosperous for any country. I have lots of good reasons for my opinion but the most important of them are: by this way not only we stimulate professors, also the students benefits and this type of investment is the best type.
First and foremost, by spending more money to professors, along them students could benefits from this money. Most of professors all over the world consider some projects to students, particularly for master studies students. Master students could contribute these projects and get scholarships by working on researches. If professors couldn't receive enough money from universities they couldn't employ students to help them during investigations and it causes that the country doesn't improve. Today if a country couldn't compete on the science aspects with other countries, surely will lose the game.
On the other hand, this kind of investment as paying more to professors is the best type and support future of country. If a university and government image that this work is wasting money and try to works have temporary options after years they will notice that made a huge mistake. For example we could consider U.S. as one of the leaders in this field. All the time they inact rules to support scientists and professors and most of time these scientist couldn't reach to good results on their surveies. But only thing which has value for government was their struggles. Now we could see easily the result of such policy and U.S. is one of the important countries in different subjects.
As a conclusion, although some people believe that spending more to professors is wasting money, I think this work's result will be obvious after several years. Not only by this way professors and students benefits also it's a best type of investment. Don't you think paying more to professors and students to research and buy new tools could be reason of country's progress?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the families') or simply say ''most families''.
Suggestion: most of the families; most families
... one of the most important issues which most of families are involved with that. It often determ...
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Suggestion: wasn't
...ies was searching for a good job but he wasnt prosperous to find suitable career. All...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...f good background education till now he couldnt find any job. This example shows that p...
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Suggestion: isn't
...This example shows that parents concern isnt meaningless. On the other hand, nowada...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...her than studying and they know that we couldnt avoid its influences. So they try to ma...
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Suggestion: don't
...sometimes for checking the net. If they dont manage children, they will waste all of...
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Line 4, column 76, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
...le think that young people should learn being independent, I believe that its not goo...
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Suggestion: Don't
...ste their valuable times with internet. Dont you think time has changed and behavior...
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Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...o professors, along them students could benefits from this money. Most of professors all...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the professors') or simply say ''Most professors''.
Suggestion: Most of the professors; Most professors
...tudents could benefits from this money. Most of professors all over the world consider some projec...
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...igations and it causes that the country doesnt improve. Today if a country couldnt com...
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...ntry doesnt improve. Today if a country couldnt compete on the science aspects with oth...
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Line 8, column 200, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'work'.
Suggestion: work
...t this work is wasting money and try to works have temporary options after years they...
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Line 8, column 440, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scientist' or 'these scientists'?
Suggestion: this scientist; these scientists
...entists and professors and most of time these scientist couldnt reach to good results on their ...
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...essors and most of time these scientist couldnt reach to good results on their surveies...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...y professors and students benefits also its a best type of investment. Dont you thi...
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
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Suggestion: Don't
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'i think', 'kind of', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269961977186 0.229887763892 117% => OK
Verbs: 0.153358681876 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0887198986058 0.0866891130778 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0405576679341 0.046263068375 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0709759188847 0.0685040099705 104% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128010139417 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0304182509506 0.0351676179071 86% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57337343975 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0304182509506 0.0309702414327 98% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0697084917617 0.0887237588012 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0190114068441 0.0209618222197 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00506970849176 0.0139019557991 36% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4379.0 2387.08602151 183% => OK
No of words: 728.0 408.028673835 178% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01510989011 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19436956006 4.48200974243 116% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339285714286 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.274725274725 0.251872472559 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193681318681 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130494505495 0.112833075102 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57337343975 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40521978022 0.524397521467 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.3048108051 59.2087087015 87% => OK
How many sentences: 38.0 20.6684587814 184% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 19.1578947368 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1634602681 48.84282405 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.236842105 120.699889404 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.263157894737 0.644075263715 41% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.5376344086 176% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.54480286738 361% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.6304222094 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.61722488038 1.45489161554 111% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247217344537 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0993658395687 0.103427244359 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0884008218826 0.0752933317313 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.463796417194 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122125236243 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833357636771 0.114077575197 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524130669882 0.0781384742642 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.303142966372 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0832637300222 0.067059652881 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14597101848 0.210909579961 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051243049866 0.0618886996521 83% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8870967742 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 20.0 8.42114695341 237% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 32.0 13.6433691756 235% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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