TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Education is an imortant part of our life, specially children's education. To doing our daily works such as payin bills, commute, and communication, everyone has to learn new technology. Without learning them, It would be very hard to live in a city. Some people believe that parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past; others disagree. In my view, parents are more involved in their children's education for some important reasons.
The first important reason is that technology intensly are advanced. Recently, children use extremely technology such as the internet, cell phone, computer games. It is very common that their parents have anxioty about their children. So they have to involved in their children's education. They may take a tutor to teach the technology to use it properly. For example, when I was in high school, I had to buy a computer which I had not had until that time. My computer teacher asked us to do some home work. So I needed a computer. At first, I was not able to work with computer. As a result, my parents took me to a computer class in a computer institution, where they teach computers. I went there. Moreover, my father's frind, who live in abroad with his family, came to our house. Seeing his children, my parents took me to a English class to learn English language. As you can see, my parents had had an impact role in my education.
Second, life values change. In the past education was not so important but now it is an important aspects of every person such as employment, social level. For example, my mother friend has two daugther who are dentist. Seeng this my mother told my sister, she had to be a Doctor in medicin. She try to be a doctor.
To sum up, Parents are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past not only because of advanceing technology but also because of changing life values. Parents should advise thier children to have a good education.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 827, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ing his children, my parents took me to a English class to learn English language...
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Line 2, column 897, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...sh language. As you can see, my parents had had an impact role in my education. Second...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'aspect'?
Suggestion: aspect
...so important but now it is an important aspects of every person such as employment, soc...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...mple, my mother friend has two daugther who are dentist. Seeng this my mother told my s...
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Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
... she had to be a Doctor in medicin. She try to be a doctor. To sum up, Parents are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, as to, for example, such as, as a result, in my view, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71469740634 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61893227011 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510086455331 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The sentence length is short
Sentence length SD: 36.5476304285 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.9230769231 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3461538462 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251516324614 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677358505836 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919567930366 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177077213416 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105080683424 0.0645574589148 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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